Oh, man, but do these pictures take me back in fandom time. I would say the first one is by far my favorite. Mostly, because Hikaru is really, a very clueless person in general, and wouldn't see a kiss coming a mile off. Akira's hair, in a word: gorgeous. Love it. And I'm digging the calligraphy on the wall too. Nice detail there. And I'm digging how you cell shaded not only the two boys (men?), but also the background. It's often easy to use different drawing/coloring techniques for the backgrounds and the characters, but this can make them disjointed.
Two things I don't love about the first pic: 1. the plains. Your lines don't line up-- you've got multiple vanishing points and it's bugging me how the surface of the go board is at a different angle than the floor. If you stick with one vanishing point, Hikaru and Akira will seem like they're part of their environment, instead of being copy-pasted on top of it. 2. Hikaru's jacket. Unless the jacket is huge on Hikaru, there would be more tension in the cloth between Akira's fist and where the jacket attaches at the waist. The cloth seems too floppy for the tension that should be in it. Other than that, I think that you've drawn the folds of the cloth extremely well, especially Akira's shirt. Cloth is hella hard to draw. XD
How old are these two supposed to be in this drawing? They sure don't look 12... >.>
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Date: 2011-01-10 05:16 pm (UTC)Two things I don't love about the first pic: 1. the plains. Your lines don't line up-- you've got multiple vanishing points and it's bugging me how the surface of the go board is at a different angle than the floor. If you stick with one vanishing point, Hikaru and Akira will seem like they're part of their environment, instead of being copy-pasted on top of it. 2. Hikaru's jacket. Unless the jacket is huge on Hikaru, there would be more tension in the cloth between Akira's fist and where the jacket attaches at the waist. The cloth seems too floppy for the tension that should be in it. Other than that, I think that you've drawn the folds of the cloth extremely well, especially Akira's shirt. Cloth is hella hard to draw. XD
How old are these two supposed to be in this drawing? They sure don't look 12... >.>